Hi all,
I have a question and would like some feedback on it. I know that in, for instance, the Firefish books the Bible and Christianity features very much, and that worked for me, but in my world I basically started with the creation story where God created the world. There is also angel-like beings and there is some of these that rebelled. The people also strive for Christian values. Now, I'm not planning on publishing this part of the world-building, but just want to have it there for the back story.
My creation-story goes like this (rough draft):
Before even time came into being, the Creator had existed. Though people will never be able to understand how this can be, we know that it is so. For there is some knowledge that the human mind is not meant to fully comprehend while the world still lives.
And it came to be that on the first day the world that we call Airthai was created by the hands of the Creator. The world and all that dwell upon it, the heavens and all that is in it was created, from the smallest insect to the farthest star in the reaches of the heavens. And it was good. And the Creator made the race of the Airus that may pass between his world and ours; the only race able to do so while still alive. And the Creator made the peoples that inhabit the lands of the world. And the race of the Airus received the most of the Talent that the Creator gave to the peoples of Airthai.
And the Creator gave to the peoples of Airthai Talents. Each received a Talent and each Talent would help and complement another.
But there were those of the Airus that became greedy and their hearts were turned to hatred of the Creator because they did not have all of the Talent, but only part. And they rebelled against the Creator and were cast away to a world of shadow and fire.
They were now known as the Lewjan, the Betrayers. And the Betrayers built their own fortress in which to live. And there they did not create, but twisted all they could to their evil.
They infested the peoples of the world and turned them from the light of the Creator to serve the master of the Lewjan. The mortals of Airthai started to call the Master of the Lewjan the Shadow Master and this evil force the Shadow. Some of the mortals decided to give up the Talent given to them by the Creator and turn to the Lewjan who always promised more and more power and control - even over the Airus who they feared to meet.
And so it was that a war - sometimes unseen, sometimes painting the fields of Airthai red - started that would last through all the ages of the world. A war that would only end on the day the sun burned its last and all the life on Airthai pass to the other world where only the immortal soul could go.
So it is written, and so we live. We fight against the Lewjan's shadow and turn to the Light. We guard ourselves and one another. And when a brother or a sister falls to the Shadow, we cry and mourn and beat our chests in anger because of the rebels. And still we fight even when our strength lessens. And we use our Talents for the good of all the nations. Even the Lost Nations, though they know it not. Or cannot comprehend it until they have been cut from the Shadow.
For when the Lost are cut off from the Lewjan's power, they have two choices - they can grovel before the Shadow Master for mercy he is unable to give. Those are said to die soon of the fear and fire that consumes them. The second choice - who many believe are not open to them - is to ask for forgiveness for what they have done from the Creator. Those that do this does not have an easy road before them, for they must face what they have done.
I welcome all input
Thanks,
Marshwriter
