This is my first essence map with the new system that I finished (Without being able to look at the tutorial while doing it). Ouskar is a new character of mine, I came up with him when I was writing my sub-forum thread on the Bards.

Treasure Hunter
-Indiana Jones
-seeker of knowledge
Reckless
-skiing down on an avalanche
-skydiver
-racing to cross the railroad in front of a train

Cocky
-Strutting Rooster
-fighter pilot

Skilled
-commando
-archaeologist

Hair
-loamy soil during a dry spell

Eyes
-hypnotic diamond whose depths are veiled by a sparkle on the surface
-ocean pool pulling you deeper in over time
-mirrors reflecting each other

Face
-forgettable
-small town that whizzes by on a long drive
-random person who passed in you in a crowd
-joyful
-adrenaline rush all the time
-insane beaming

Body
-lean
-endurance runner
-stretched spring

Spirit
-restless
-wild stallion
-career traveler who is always traveling
-confident
-mafia don in his own home
-Olympic kayaker preparing for a run
-enthusiastic
-teenager talking about their passion in life
-football addict

I couldn't think of anything else. Suggestions?

This one seems redundant--

I can't give a critique on the rest though. I don't understand much of essence yet.

I wasn't sure if people could make sense of career traveler.

It makes sense to me...

That's good.

Good job Varon!

My favorite parts:

Hair
-loamy soil during a dry spell

Eyes
-hypnotic diamond whose depths are veiled by a sparkle on the surface
-ocean pool pulling you deeper in over time
-mirrors reflecting each other

Face
-forgettable
-small town that whizzes by on a long drive
-random person who passed you in a crowd
-joyful
-insane beaming

Body
-lean
-stretched spring

Spirit
-restless
-confident

My especially favorite parts:

Eyes
-hypnotic diamond whose depths are veiled by a sparkle on the surface

Face
-forgettable

Spirit
-restless
-confident

My favorite of all:

Eyes
-hypnotic diamond whose depths are veiled by a sparkle on the surface


I think it is emphasizing that it is a career traveller who is always travelling. I think it makes sense.

Thanks!

I'll have to do some more of these essence maps, they make good practice for nailing down who a character is.

I like the diamond one as well, I had to rewrite it many times to get it the way I wanted it.