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 Post subject: Chayn's Essence
PostPosted: May 25th, 2011, 7:01 pm 
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Chayn (blue dragon)

Body...{Scales...[Color...(A cloudless pastel sky)]
.......................[Shine...(Sunlight on sapphires)
...................................(A polished mirror)]
.......................[Size.....(A balled up fist)]
.......................[Hardness....(Diamonds)
.........................................(A mountain face)]
.......................[Thickness...(A soldier's armor)
.........................................(A steel shield)]}
..........{Eyes...[Color...(A lake bottom)
.................................(A dark ocean)]
.....................[Sparkle....(Stars at twilight)]
.....................[Depth.....(Deep wells)
...................................(A star-sprinkled ocean)]}
..........{Talons/Teeth/Horns/Back spikes....[Color...(A bed of pearls)
......................................................(Soft clouds)]
...........................................[Sharpness.....(Sharpened swords)
................................................................(Sewing needles)]}
..........{Strength.....(Two giants)
.............................(A severe thunderstorm)
.............................(A firm and gentle hand)]}
..........{Wings........(Tough canvas)
............................(Thick tree boughs)
............................(The arm of a veteran farmer)]}
..........{Tail...........(A wide tree trunk)
............................(Fur of a cat (at the end of her tail))}

Spirit.............{Cheerfulness....(A mother at her child's wedding)
............................................(A soldier in the victor's side)}
....................{Loyalty..........(A friend to her companion on a quest)
.........................................(A husband's wife, in sickness and in health)}
....................{Sorrow.........(A mother losing her child)
.........................................(A country taken over)}
....................{Fear............(An adventurer in the face of danger)}
....................{Anger.........(A roaring sea)
........................................(A mother bear bereaved of her cubs)}
.....................{Love.........(A neverending fountain)
......................................(Sunshine)}

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PostPosted: May 26th, 2011, 1:40 am 
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:shock: Wow, the strength of two giants in the size of my fist? Imagine the strength of a dragon my size. :cool:

I would recommened changing the "Dark blue midnight" to a metaphor that doesn't have a color in it. Other than that, good essence.

(This coming from someone who hasn't done an essence yet. :roll: )

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PostPosted: May 26th, 2011, 6:03 am 
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:shock: Wow, Aris, lovely essence map! A cloudless pastel sky and sunlight on sapphires! I love those. Well done.

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Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
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 Post subject: Re: Chayn's Essence
PostPosted: May 26th, 2011, 9:10 am 
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Beautiful, Aris. Knowing Chayn through my own characters, I can definitely see how these fit and learn some new things! :D I especially like "the arms of a veteran farmer" and "a roaring sea". :)

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 Post subject: Re: Chayn's Essence
PostPosted: May 26th, 2011, 2:17 pm 
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Thanks, all. :) It's been a while since I've done one. I'm glad Chayn's turned out well.

Suiauthon - The scales are the size of a balled up fist. Chayn herself is more or less a couple feet shorter than Sapphira in Eragon (she's not full grown yet).

Ooh, I thought of what I can change the dark blue one. I used the color words because I couldn't think up anything that was dark blue. But now I have! (I hope)

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