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So, I'm working on a book and I thought I'd share with you guys the history of my world. I'll probably end up posting a few topics about my characters and the really basic storyline of my book, but for now I was just curious what you guys thought of my world history since I love constructive criticism and sharing my writings with other writers. I hope you enjoy it and comment if you can, I'll try to reply to as many comments as possible.
NOTE:I call my people, humans because I didn't feel the need to come up with a genius name...mainly because I couldn't, but I'll probably end up changing the name by the end of the book. I never seem to make up my mind.
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As it was a women that had betrayed him only a woman could set things right during the last days, after the Sword of Mortals had been discovered.
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As legend goes the world in which they lived was not always peppered with thieves and battlefields from past wars. When Taviel created the world for his humans and creatures he had made, it was filled with trees each bearing a different fruit holding a different purpose and soft grass. The humans lived in peace each one unique in their talents no two exactly alike. There were the hunters, the gathers, musicians, and protectors. The animals were not known to attack, but the humans still had to hunt them for meat, though not more than necessary.
Each human prayed daily to Taviel, they never saw him, they didn't have to, they just knew that he was and that he had created them. Taviel lived in the sky in a kingdom yet to be seen by human eyes, he had spirits that he took care of. They were to protect the humans and keep everything at piece, but after 5 years of a peaceful world Taviel's most beloved spirit began to build up greed in his heart. He planned an attack with a few other spirits who too had become consumed in power. And a war broke through in the sky.
During the 3 years that war was close at hand the humans would see lighting and hear thunder and screams come from the sky. The dark clouds covered the sun the rays never to be let through.
After three years of fighting the trader and his army he had created fled to earth and became human in form. Taviel created a dark forest to keep the trader from harming his creations. Taviel came to earth and his army became human in form, though he remained of spirit. And so like this, with the trader on the east and Taviel on the west there was peace for a small amount of time in the world.
One day a woman was gathering food for her family when a pack of wild wolves who had turned over to the traders side, turned on her and chased her into the forest. Soon, after hours of running, she was tired, when she came across a cottage. She would have questioned the mysterious building, but the wolves were now on her heels and she needed cover, so she entered.
No one is really sure what happened in the cottage, but it is said that she met the trader, who told her his name was Fallen and preceded to shower her with lies. He showed her a scar on his right cheek and explained to her that Taviel had put it there because he was a heartless king, and she believed him, all lies, though them seemed true enough to her. He offered food and a place to sleep, so she accepted.
The next morning she woke in the cottage and could not find the kind stranger, so she began to wander the woods calling out to him, she broke through the forest and was met by and army of Fallen's men all of them equipped with swords and shields ready for battle, she agreed to help them in their war and with this woman's help Fallen emerged from the forest and began to pollute the human land. As he went more into the land a desert was created from the land the humans fled from, the trees and grass died without their care and eventually it was no more than a harsh barren land.
Taviel was distressed to see his own people turn against him so a sword was molded, from the chair that Fallen had sat upon when he was in the house of the king. A symbol of a fire of blood was stamped on it. He hid the sword in a tree in the forest that separated the humans from the darkness, one day Fallen would be drawn to that sword and the last days would begin. Until these days Toviel would live on the land in a palace, preventing Fallen from emerging from the forest and overpowering all of Toviel's kingdom. Toviel knew something though that Fallen did not. As it was a woman that had betrayed him only a woman could set things right during the last days, after the Sword of Mortals had been discovered.
It was because of this that now, 136 years later, war had broke through and Taviel had sent out a descendent of the very woman who had betrayed him on a journey.
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Sorry if it was a little long, once I start to babble I tend not to stop. My sister thinks I talk to much, haha. Thanks for reading! And have a wonderful day!
Bethany Faith
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