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 Post subject: The History of the Red World Part I - Before it Came to Be
PostPosted: November 26th, 2010, 4:49 pm 
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I will start by giving you the underlying superstructure of existence as it is portrayed for the purpose of this book. God creates the angels, which are lesser beings. One-third of them rebel, led by Satan, who was the foremost of the angels before. God establishes Michael the Archangel as His second in command. Satan sets up Narok as his greatest liuetenant. Among God's legions is a particular angel without any given name other than "The White Cross" by which the people of my world know him. Only Narok and the White Cross are directly involved hereafter:

At some point in eternity, Narok the demon assaulted the White Cross in a duel. Neither could prevail over the other. Narok departed to seek more demons to join him in his war, which was now in a way a vendetta, against the White Cross. The White Cross, however, increased his strength by creating a small world, no larger than a small mountain, on which was set his fortress, and within which was "That Which is Within." When Narok brought his fresh hordes against the White Cross again, there was again a perfect tie of their forces. Narok departed.

The White Cross again sought greater strength by creating new forces, this time on a far grander scale. He created six great estates around his own, giving each a color, a number, and a king. The Red World was, obviously, given the color of red, and assigned the number six. The kings of these worlds were immensely powerful, gods in their own right to mortal eyes. The only one with a name so far is the king of the Red World, Aerykun (Uh-air-ri-koon). Narok came against this whole world system with even greater strength, and though both sides lost much, he could not succeed in toppling the White Cross fortress. His defeat was in large part due to the strength of the kings, led by the most clever of them all, Aerykun. Though some of the other kings outdid him in valiance, devotion, courage, subtlety, and sheer strength, there was none so cunning as Aerykun.

Narok now sought a different tactic. It is unknown how he contacted him, but Narok subverted Aerykun to his service by promises of great reward, presitge, and what Aerykun loved most, power.

To each king had been given three tokens of his authority, as granted by the White Cross: a crown, a throne, and either a weapon or armor.

Narok struck at the White Cross's empire again, and when it looked first as though he would be defeated, Aerykun suddenly turned on his own fellows and struck them grievously. He and Narok fought their way to the top of the Mount, on which was built the White Cross's fortress, but there the might of the Cross turned them back, they being already greatly wearied by the struggle. As they fled Narok left Aerykun behind, Narok being the faster. As Narok departed he captured the king of the orange world along with his crown and armor. The thrones were built onto the plaza which sat in front of the great doors into the White Cross fortress.

Aerykun had yet to escape. Most of the kings were to greatly wearied to challenge his flight, but the Green King, carrying his great sword, challenged Aerykun's exit. Aerykun had little time to escape before all the Cross's forces would surround and subdue him. The Green King swept his sword for Aerykun's head, and as Aerykun ducked his crown was struck by the sword and sent flying back toward the Mount. Having no time to retrieve it, Aerykun struck at his former friend and hewed off his sword arm. Aerykun then bolted away following Narok.

Aerykun returned once on raid to seek his crown. Again the Green King stopped him, but in so doing the Green King lost his life to Aerykun's greater might. Aerykun was forced to flee without his crown. When Aerykun had completed his escape, he found the armor he had worn was broken by the Green King's efforts, and its power was gone. Thus Aerykun lost all three tokens of his strength, but his power was not gone.

Soon after this last raid the estates of the kings began to separate. At first only inlets of the sea divided them, but then at the day of the Division fires sprouted in the midst of the seas, and the great change struck. No longer only islands, the worlds were transformed into planets, each separated from the others. While certain supernatural points existed that could connect them, including one massive cavern which mysteriously connected all six, few would pass between the worlds for the next several ages, except perhaps the spirits.


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 Post subject: Re: The History of the Red World Part I - Before it Came to
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Interesting... does your story only take place on/in the Red World? Or do you have stories about the other worlds too? (I'm now curious about them :D )

I like the name "The White Cross" :cool:

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does your story only take place on/in the Red World? Or do you have stories about the other worlds too?

My main story with all my favorite characters, and the one I know best, is all in the Red World. I have begun some work on the Green World, because one of the main characters of my novel is from the Green World, but most the other worlds don't have anything known about them. The Purple and Orange worlds I know a little about, and I know the Blue world will end up being the 3rd world, but the Yellow has nothing at all. If you have ideas you would like to implement, I am happy to oblige. I let one of my friends pick the number for the Blue world.

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Do the colors (in the titles) have anything to do with the worlds? Like, are things in the red world mostly red tinted?

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Do the colors (in the titles) have anything to do with the worlds? Like, are things in the red world mostly red tinted?

Not really. The colors, like the numbers, were assigned arbitrarily. Their kings tend to wear the color given their world, especially in their battle armor. Also, when all the worlds were still joined, there was a flag that flew near the fortress which had a white sun in the center with each of the six primary and secondary colors surrounding it in sections. When the worlds began to separate the flag was torn with each of the kings taking their part.

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I like it. It was really well thought out and interesting. :D

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This is really good. It does remind me of The Binding of the Blade a bit, but that's because they're both based on the same event.

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Varon wrote:
This is really good. It does remind me of The Binding of the Blade a bit, but that's because they're both based on the same event.


Well, I have never heard of The Binding of the Blade, so any likeness to books, published or unpublished, is purely unintentional and not meant to reflect on the beliefs or opinions of either me or them. :rofl:

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It's a Christian allegory with the betrayal as a prologue.

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This is great! I've read some of your other threads and your story seems to be very well developed. I'm not sure how I feel about the angel creating the worlds, but I can't think of any objections, so don't mind me!

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