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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:00 am 
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how should I have a spirit appear?

In the book, not all spirits are bad, but I need an idea of how I should have them appear (like when they're summoned). I'm not favoring the "flash-bang-poof!" idea. It can't be something big (I don't want everyone knowing someone summoned a spirit). But I need something big enough to catch the summoner's attention.

Right now I'm thinking something like:
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She heard a soft rumble, the sound of water falling and then something glowed behind her.

Ideas welcome :)

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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:03 am 
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She heard a soft rumble, the sound of water falling and then something glowed behind her.




I like this one! I like the idea of a glow, and the soft rumble makes me think of thunder. You could have a flash of lightening; its not a big bang but it catches your attention :)

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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:08 am 
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Are we talking a good context or bad?

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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:10 am 
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An all around one, for both good and bad. Maybe edited to lean towards one or the other...

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My name is outward proof of my promise to follow, closer and closer, the words and will of my Lord and Father.


note:
Vilisse is Quenya for a person's spirit or general personality.
Mimetes is Greek for an imitator or follower.

and so my spirit is one of a follower



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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:14 am 
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Probably go with the glowing thing...

I'd also be interested in doing it silently, as if they just became visible and had been there all the time.

Or you could use a portal effect.

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PostPosted: November 9th, 2010, 11:20 am 
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I thought of the portal effect... I like the thought of them just appearing, but I need some sort of sound- (interrupts self) Wait! hm... silent? I'm beginning to like the sound of that :cool:
How about this:
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She turned away, but a moment later felt a soft breeze hit her back. The grass around her swayed and she turn around...

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My name is outward proof of my promise to follow, closer and closer, the words and will of my Lord and Father.


note:
Vilisse is Quenya for a person's spirit or general personality.
Mimetes is Greek for an imitator or follower.

and so my spirit is one of a follower



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That reminds me of Narnia. I like it. :)

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Yay! Now I can get back to writing :roll: (and I'm gonna keep the glowing part ;) )

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My name is outward proof of my promise to follow, closer and closer, the words and will of my Lord and Father.


note:
Vilisse is Quenya for a person's spirit or general personality.
Mimetes is Greek for an imitator or follower.

and so my spirit is one of a follower



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PostPosted: November 10th, 2010, 10:07 pm 
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I know you kind of already decided, but I personally like the "they were there" sort of thing. A person was there, did some things, and then when you look again they're gone. It's really more "mystical" than the whole glowing thing. Plus, it's less common. I don't know how well it'd work in your story, but that's my opinion.

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PostPosted: November 11th, 2010, 6:23 am 
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Oh no! I'm too late! But for anybody else, I think it would be cool if a bright glowing happened for good spirits and with evil ones a strange darkness. If I ever decide to have spirits I'll do mine like that. :D

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PostPosted: November 11th, 2010, 6:27 am 
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Yea I like that idea Elan, It separates the good and bad in some ways :) In Frank Peretti's books the evil spirits smelt of sulfur as well, didn't they? :)

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From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king

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My favourite quote: "God will give His kindness for you to use when your own runs out."

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Wow, probably the first time somebody has shortened my name...

I have never read Peretti's books, I've heard they are somewhat controversial, plus I don't think we have them. Maybe I'll try to get my hands on them...

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Well, Piercing the Darkness is the best, This Present Darkness should be read first but it isn't as good, however if you don't read them in order the second book doesn't make sense in every place. I know, we have it but my parents have never been to sure what they think about it, some people think you shouldn't look into heavenly things we can't understand. Personally I just see them as a great read!

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Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost.

From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king

J. R. R. Tolkien


My favourite quote: "God will give His kindness for you to use when your own runs out."

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*Starting new topic in reviews, or whatever it was renamed to.*

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PostPosted: November 12th, 2010, 11:02 am 
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I'm not favoring the "flash-bang-poof!" idea.


My first idea was a blinding flash and a loud bang. =) Am I predictable or what?

I like the rumbling and water though. If you have elemental spirits you could change it up depending on their element...

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