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PostPosted: September 29th, 2009, 5:39 pm 
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These are the goblins from my fantasy novel that I am currently revising.
(The description is an scene from chapter six of the novel. [note: it's from the rough draft, so the description is not very good. When I revise that section I'll update this post.])

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They ranged from four to five feet in height. Their skin was a sickly brown and they hunched over as they ran. Long seemingly noseless, ugly faces jutted out from their thick necks, attached to small armor clad bodies. The goblins could move fast and stealthy like a fox...


Not much I know, so here is some more.

They live in underground cities they call burghals. Each clan has their own section. In the center of each burghal is an underground arena of sorts where the warriors train. For the most part goblins will stay on their side of the mountains, unless forced out by another clan, or due to famine or war.


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PostPosted: September 30th, 2009, 8:05 am 
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Are these goblins sentient, capable of reform (becoming good guys), related to humans in any way, and self-organizing (able to create and maintain internal cultures)? Very few people few goblins in light of these variables. My goblins are actually a form of zheigor (incarnate demons), but that is just me. Some people regard their goblins as barely sentient beasts that cannot have internal culture and are utterly dependent upon their dark lord for survival. JRR Tolkien was not like that, and that was one of his appeals, I think. What do you think?

I like what you have so far by the way. :)

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PostPosted: September 30th, 2009, 4:29 pm 
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These goblins are more like Tolkiens Orcs. They don't have a highly developed culture (like Paolini's Urgles), but they do have a "system of life".
They are in a sense creatures, but they are not fully animal.
I wouldn't say they are capable of reform, they were created by evil for evil, but they can survive on their own just fine.
I personally love what Tolkien did with his orcs. It's different from the average evil, two legged beasties, and I'm all for it.

I'm glad you like it. I wanted to try and do something different with your average goblin.

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Hey, SG! Your goblins are very interesting. So are they capable of doing good or are they limited to evil?

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I would have to say they are not capable of doing good. They were made by evil for evil.

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So are they races of their own with certain complications that they provide for the heros? I still have the Tolkien mentality where they serve as the army for the main villian (Or Satan in other words). Oh And one other question: Were they made by the evil one or were they created by the good creator and then became fallen beings. And did they become goblins over time or were they like that from the beggining? Sounds very cool and yucky :D

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I like them, but if they were created by the evil one on your story, he must have based it off another race, right? Satan can only make imperfect copies of what God creates.

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