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 Post subject: "Tell Me More" Challenge --- Nick and Herb's Story
PostPosted: June 28th, 2017, 5:12 pm 
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For lack of a better name, this is my blurb for Nick & Herb's Story

Two friends find themselves on opposite sides of a brewing revolution. Their attempt to remain friends and find joy despite their chaotic world causes a whole new type of revolution.


It's kinda short, but there you have it.


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 Post subject: Re: "Tell Me More" Challenge --- Nick and Herb's Story
PostPosted: June 29th, 2017, 11:56 am 
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I'd have to say "Tell me more!" I'm intrigued as to what the revolution is about, why they are on opposing sides, and what this 'new type of revolution' is.

However, I have to ask, could you maybe add a sentence of two that might raise the stakes a little? I understand remaining friends is a huge stake, but does this new type of revolution add anything to the stakes? Are there any barriers that they have to overcome in order to remain friends?

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PostPosted: June 29th, 2017, 1:03 pm 
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Tell me more!

This is an excellent plot frame--revolution never gets old!--so you'll want to add more details to show how this revolution story is different from, say, Hunger Games. You'll also want to convey the genre. Is this historical fiction? Sci-fi? Fantasy? What are we revolting against?

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