Beautifully written!
You don't mention dragons in the poem itself, but I love how you clarify it with the title, and the poem itself may be applied to any sort of mystical fantasy beast.
Great job!
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| Author: | Airianna Valenshia [ November 8th, 2010, 10:54 am ] |
| Post subject: | The Dragon's Friend |
Okay guys, here is my new blog submission, it is called, The Dragon's Friend. For all dragon lovers, may the dragon never grow extinct. Keep them alive with your pen and your ink. In the conjures of mind is the beast set at liberty Their race and majesty long lost in tragedy Inspiration the air that breaths life in their wings Visions of glory and breathless wonder still clings, Free but for the night though their wish is always When light of dawn ends chill morning haze Then alas the beauty of glory days gone As the sun breaks the mountains subverting the dawn. As the magic is broken imagination lays at rest mighty beast of the sky but a memory at best Thus I beg you fair reader remain the creature’s friend Open the page, seize up the pen, let their days of might never end. -Airianna/Kaitlyn E |
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| Author: | Elanhil [ November 8th, 2010, 8:45 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Very good! I like the style, how it's written to the author. |
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| Author: | Ciela Rose [ November 8th, 2010, 9:01 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Beautifully written! You don't mention dragons in the poem itself, but I love how you clarify it with the title, and the poem itself may be applied to any sort of mystical fantasy beast. Great job! |
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| Author: | Airianna Valenshia [ November 8th, 2010, 9:16 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Exactly! For me that majestically mystical creature is the Dragon, but it could be a griffon for someone else. I’ve dreamed about taming dragons ever since I was a very small girl (long before they were popularized by Eragon and similar works). I wanted to leave it subjective, thus I did not use dragon in the actual poem. However, I also wanted it to gently prod your mind to think of a Dragon. I was actually thinking of changing the title to aid in this idea of the poem being subjective to the reader, but I didn’t come up with anything convincing, so I left it as the title you now see it under. Thank you both. |
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| Author: | PrincessoftheKing [ November 8th, 2010, 10:28 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
I love it! You did a beautiful job. 
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| Author: | Whythawye [ November 9th, 2010, 3:51 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Looks great!
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| Author: | Kiev Shawn [ November 9th, 2010, 7:36 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Agreed.
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| Author: | Rachel Newhouse [ November 9th, 2010, 4:33 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
This is lovely! The narrative has a majestic feel. I didn't even notice that "dragon" wasn't explicitly mentioned in the narrative. The title set me in the mood and the words produced the vision. Strangely beautiful, that. Only one suggestions. One, you might consider replacing "get out" in the last line with a more regal one-word term like "seize," or "take." "Get" is often a very casual word, and for some reason I think it that line might flow better if it were one word shorter. But I'm not a poet (very much), so that's just an idea that occurred to me. Wonderfully done, Airianna! |
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| Author: | Aragorn [ November 11th, 2010, 1:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
The sentiment of the poem is vividly and consistently expressed in lines like "Their race and majesty long lost in tragedy" all the way to the last line, "Open the page, get out the pen, let their days of might never end". |
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| Author: | Lady Elanor [ November 11th, 2010, 4:55 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
It's so inspirational! I love it, so beautiful!
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| Author: | Elanhil [ November 11th, 2010, 6:10 am ] |
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I've said this before but I'll say it again. I love it! Beautiful work. |
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| Author: | Airianna Valenshia [ November 11th, 2010, 8:45 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Thank you all very much. I think I will take Phili's advice and change the last line to "seize up". It think it goes better with the tone of the poem. |
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| Author: | 6stringedsignseeker [ November 11th, 2010, 2:02 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
I love it! Nice job, Airianna.
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| Author: | Airianna Valenshia [ November 24th, 2010, 5:57 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Dragon's Friend |
Okay guys, I have added this to the blog, so it is now time to archive this thread. Thanks for the participation.
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