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Author:  Lady Vilisse Mimetes [ June 24th, 2012, 12:07 am ]
Post subject:  Fake Bloopers (in your books)

Soooo, I was digging around in files today and discovered a strange little... something, haha. I'm curious if any of you have ever done this. Sometime in the past I'd decided to make fake bloopers of some lines from my writing (as if they were being filmed for a movie -- yes, I'm strange, I thought that was covered?). Ever done anything like that? Here's what I wrote to give you an example ;)


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“You shall not…” Naeoar burst out laughing in the middle of his sentence, “Whoops, sorry, wrong story… Ah… where were we?” he said giving me a grin that said this was totally planned. Letting a smile slide I called out.
“Okay, let’s try that again, remember, it’s; ‘May I help you?’ and try to act like you could care less who these people are, Okay? Got it?” he nodded, “Good.” I finished, sitting back in my chair. “Action!” Naeoar opened the door and burst out laughing. Jendai gave the camera a silly look and I couldn’t help laughing as well.
“Cut! Cut, cut, cut, cut, cut!” I said smiling.

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“That’s not much older than you!” Ravna said excitedly. There was a pause as we waited for Sanah to say her line, she fumbled and finally burst out, “Inconceivable!” before laughing.

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“…there was another king known as…ah…Kell? Kell, Kell, Kell, Kellmutare? Ah…Kelltare? Killmentaur? Kill the mentor?” there was a pause, “Isn’t anybody going to stop me before I totally kill this line?”

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“Now, I’ll try to tell you everything I remember…Ah…” Sanah paused.
“She can’t remember anything.” Ravna giggled.
“I don’t remember my line.”

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“Who is it?” Sanah called towards the door. There was a pause.
“You’re worst nightmare!” Ravna said in a deep voice. There was another pause before Sanah let out a very girly – very fake – scream.

Author:  6stringedsignseeker [ June 24th, 2012, 2:30 am ]
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I think that it's an awesome idea :dieshappy: I think I'd like doing that in my blog at least. Might be kind of cool to add at the end of a book as well.

Author:  Constable Jaynin Mimetes [ June 24th, 2012, 12:27 pm ]
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Hahahaha! :rofl:

Now that's a new idea for characters... the characters aren't really real. They're just actors. They have ordinary happy lives that we have no control over, and just play the part in the books like they're supposed to. So we're never actually hurting them....
Lady Vilisse Mimetes wrote:
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“…there was another king known as…ah…Kell? Kell, Kell, Kell, Kellmutare? Ah…Kelltare? Killmentaur? Kill the mentor?” there was a pause, “Isn’t anybody going to stop me before I totally kill this line?”


That one is my favorite. :rofl:

Author:  Captain Nemo Marlene [ June 25th, 2012, 10:02 pm ]
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YES YES YES! Someone else who does this! Elly and I are writing a fanfic together, and we are doing this! It works out nicely because it's TV show fanfics, so we pretend the actors interrupt like they might IRL. Here are a few of ours:

The Attack of the Cookie

“Joe! Get your hand out of those cookies!” A voice called. Gertrude, Fenton Hardy’s sister, appeared in the doorway of the kitchen.

“Too late,” Joe replied with a hint of sarcasm.

Gertrude sent him a reproachful glance. “Out of my kitchen before you track in dirt and mud and who-knows-what-else from outside!”

Grinning, Joe reached his hand in the cookie jar for one last chocolate chip cookie as he trudged outside, Frank on his heels.

Then they spotted a man walking up their driveway. He was a lanky sort of fellow with straight, short brown hair. He wore a plaid suit, too. The boys walked out to meet him.

“Uh, hello. My name is Jack McGee, I’m a reporter for the National Register--”

Shaun: “So, wait. Joe doesn’t even get to eat the cookies? What is he going to do with them if he doesn’t get to eat them? Throw them at McGee?”

Parker: “There’s an idea.” *chuckles*

Shaun: “Hey, McGee! Take this!” *throws a cookie*

Jack Colvin: *catches the cookie and eats it* “Thanks Shaun.”

Parker: *Begins to laugh*

Shaun: “Want another one?” *throws it and hits Jack in the face* “Take that, nosey reporter!”

Jack: “OW! Cookies hurt! Now, come on. All I want to do is talk with Fenton Hardy.”

Parker: *begins to laugh uncontrollably*

Shaun: “Why do you want to talk with our dad?! Huh?” *throws another cookie* “He’s none of your business!” *throws another cookie* “Get out!” *starts laughing and throws another cookie*

Jack: *guards his head from the cookies* “Alright! Alright! I’ll leave! I guess you don’t care about the ten thousand dollars then! Fine!” *starts running away laughing*

Shaun: “The thousand dollars? WAIT!” *runs after Jack laughing*

Parker: *laughs uncontrollably and falls to the ground, laughing*


The Best Reporter Ever

“I just want to be a good reporter. And...” McGee turned his gaze to his pancakes, “I fear I’m not.”

“Not? What do you mean, not?” Joe bit into a piece of pancake and made a face.

“Oh, Mr. McGee, I think you’re a fine writer!” Frank was quick to chime in.

Jack Colvin: “A fine writer? That’s IT??”

Shaun: “Whaddya want him to say? That you’re the best writer in the whole universe?”

Jack: “That would be nice, yeah. But I know I write well. I said I’m a bad reporter. Though I don’t really believe it. Who wrote this script anyways?”

Parker: *starts laughing*

Shaun: “Oh, hail the wonderful reporter! His only story that he’s written for the past three years is on a giant green man he can’t get any information about! Oooh! Big scary Jack is going to get his big break with the monster! Ooooh!”

Jack: “Now cut it out, Shaun!” *grabs a spatula and hits Shaun*

Parker: *laughs some more*

Shaun: *throws a pancake at Jack*

Director: *while laughing* “CUT!”


Oh So Talented

Mac tapped his thumbs against the steering wheel in rhythm to the song on the radio. Glancing both ways, he accelerated at the green light, causing his car tires to squeal on the gravel. He pulled into the driveway some minutes later.

Richard Dean Anderson: “Oooh! I’m so talented!”

Bill Bixby: “Just don’t crash. Okay? Honestly, I could drive better than you.”

Richard: “Are you serious? Did you just see how much talent that took?

Bill: “Um... I had to drive a car acting like I had two paralyzed legs in one episode... I had to use a crutch to push on the accelerator! If that isn’t talent, then I don’t know what is.”

Richard: “Was the crutch made out of duct tape?”

Bill: “No...”

Richard: “See? I am so talented!”



Expel Shaun from the Kitchen, Please?

Joe bit into a piece of pancake and made a face.

Shaun: “Who made these disgusting pancakes?? Whoever made them should be expelled from the kitchen --- permanently!”

Parker: *slight cough* “Um... if I remember correctly, you did.”

Shaun: “What? Oh... yeah. *gulps pancake down with some force* Delicious.”


Unfriendly Competition

Mac chuckled. “Feel up to a little friendly competition on the air hockey table?”

“I’m not very good with air hockey, but I think I could give it a shot,” David said while clearing the table.

Bill: “You’re telling me to say I’m not very good at air hockey? I’m a PRO!”

Richard: “I know it’ll be hard. But try. Try really hard to be really bad.”

Bill: “What?”

Richard: *slides on hockey gloves* “You ready?”

Bill: “Yeah.”

[Half-hour later]

Bill: “I told you I was a pro at air hockey!”

Richard: “It was a TIE.”

Bill: “But only because you had the gloves on. A tie with you is like beating anyone else.”

Richard: *rolls his eyes* *makes a quick shot with the puck and scores* “Now I’ve won.” *runs away laughing*

Bill: *grabs a dish towel and chases Richard*


These are just as fun to make as the actual story. :rofl:

Author:  Airianna Valenshia [ July 3rd, 2012, 1:09 pm ]
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This is a hilarious and fun idea. :D

Author:  RunningWolf [ July 3rd, 2012, 3:08 pm ]
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:rofl: I've never done this, though I like the idea. :D

Author:  6stringedsignseeker [ July 6th, 2012, 2:00 am ]
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I'm seriously contemplating doing this with some of my favorite scenes. :D

Author:  Celestria [ July 6th, 2012, 8:44 am ]
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You're not the only one, I'm afraid. Though I don't write them out like we're on a movie set as much as my characters go on random tangents. :roll: Here's two examples from two of my stories, the second being the novel I'm currently working on.

Michael blinked. "The Deceiver called you back."

My hands were trembling. I tried to hide them behind my back. "So?"

"You answered."

"So?"

"What'd he do? Include a love note? 'PS, forget that I just threatened you. Would you come to dinner with me tonight? It's very formal so please leave you're dagger at home.'"

Dreamer lifted a shoulder in a half-hearted shrug. "It's a nice restaurant. They have chocolate cake. I could use some chocolate right now."

"They also have stake-knives!" Michael snatched the cell phone and clicked redial.

"What are you doing?" Dreamer hissed.

"What do you think I'm going to do! I'm going to threaten him. You're supposed to be my girl, not some gutless flip-flop who occasionally has meals with the dark side. Next time we meet, he better hope he's the faster runner of the two."



“You didn’t have to give me Shadowless,” Chayton said. He swung his saddlebags behind the saddle, the weight of the gateway documents feeling equally heavy to the weight on his mind.

Killian stood watching him from over the horse’s back. He straightened slowly as if he had stood hunched like that for years and the slight movement hurt. He wanted to say more – Chayton sensed it – but he didn’t.

"Oh, I get it." Chayton turned to untie the reins from the fence post. "Leave on quest to find some girl I've never met and make sure the bad guy doesn't reach her first. Get a free warhorse." Nothing says 'Have a safe journey, son. Hope you come back in one piece though I highly doubt you will.' like a horse in armor." His gaze flicked to Killian. "You know most people just buy a wedding present."

Author:  Lady Eruwaedhiel [ July 6th, 2012, 9:32 pm ]
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Teehee! I am going into Celestria withdrawal and those are hilariously funny. :rofl:

More of this ingenious humor needs to go on your blog, m'girl.

Author:  Celestria [ July 7th, 2012, 9:14 am ]
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Eleutheria Mimetes wrote:
Teehee! I am going into Celestria withdrawal and those are hilariously funny. :rofl:

More of this ingenious humor needs to go on your blog, m'girl.


Well, then... I shall have to try to appease you with a hilarious next post. :D

Author:  BushMaid [ July 10th, 2012, 5:35 pm ]
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Wait: Celestria has a blog? :shock:

Author:  Celestria [ July 11th, 2012, 7:54 am ]
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Yep, the link is in my siggyature there. Got a lot of upcoming posts planned. ;)

Author:  BushMaid [ July 11th, 2012, 4:49 pm ]
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*pounceclick* :cool:

Author:  Crushmaster [ July 12th, 2012, 2:45 am ]
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Some of my old writing is so bad that it counts as a bloopers. ;)

My best friend and I were talking about two of the worst lines from our writing, and we literally could not stop laughing because they were so utterly lame and cheesy.

That was a fun day.
God bless,
Joel ><>.

Author:  BushMaid [ July 12th, 2012, 2:56 am ]
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Do we get to hear these lines? ;) :D

Author:  Celestria [ July 12th, 2012, 7:31 am ]
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Yes! Do we get to hear them?

Author:  Constable Jaynin Mimetes [ July 12th, 2012, 1:31 pm ]
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Celestria.... :shock: That's the style I'm deliberately trying to copy in my supervillain series. More like intentional bloopers. 'specially since the entire thing is a sort of spoof on comic books... I should copy those onto my wall and study them. Way to bring humor into a serious scene! I love it! :D

Author:  Kiev Shawn [ August 21st, 2012, 2:19 pm ]
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These are hilarious. :rofl:

I wrote one of these the other day. o.O
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“It's my office, after all. His name is...What IS Lars’ last name???”

“I can’t remember?” I grinned sheepishly. “Sorry, let me find it..." I flicked through my various notes and took my eyes off my characters. Bad idea.

"I should not be working under these conditions!!!"

"At least you don't end up nearly getting killed!" Jayson tossed him a look of disgust. "Talk about conditions."

"Oh, the poor reckless top agent. Who do you think you are, the main character?"

I desperately cut Jayson off: "Found it! Let's redo this from the top."

Author:  FiddleGuitarist [ August 31st, 2012, 5:27 pm ]
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Now that is hilarious... :rofl: I'm gonna have to try this...

Author:  Lady Elanor [ September 2nd, 2012, 1:26 pm ]
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:rofl: That's priceless! So funny, Elizabeth!

Author:  Kiev Shawn [ September 5th, 2012, 11:09 am ]
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Hehe, thanks, y'all. :D

Author:  RedWing the Purple [ September 5th, 2012, 12:01 pm ]
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:rofl:

I've never considered doing this. I want to. Bloopers with Alastar and Emai. That'd be awesome to write. XD

I do actually have some blooper-like material in one of my books - In Which the Night is Dark and Stormy, which I think is on the forum somewhere, though I haven't updated it in ages...

Author:  Caeli [ September 12th, 2012, 3:00 pm ]
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I don't have any actually bloopers--yet. Now that I've heard the idea, some are sure to pop up, especially with NaNo just around the corner.

But I have done some crazy things with my stories: I've entered them as a somewhat mysterious/crazy/magical being (The Author, or sometimes The Authoress...) and both yelled at my characters, or occasionally shoved them off cliffs. I also have a running 'outtake' which I'm calling 'The Council of Excellent Comrades' in which all my characters are gathered for a business meeting of sorts--including the villains and those characters which get killed ;) --and everything erupts into craziness.

My first NaNo I actually entered the story a lot--about once every other chapter--to straighten things out. I'll have to see if I can't find some of those scenes... XD

Author:  Cain [ September 19th, 2012, 2:40 pm ]
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I don't have any bloopers yet, but if my fantasy novel was a comedy instead of a drama, a series of events would happen like this:

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Keallan studied the meadow. "There should be some trap or something set here. The Faeries just won't let anybody in."

Terran nodded in agreement, crossing his arms and frowning.

Ingvar knelt down on the ground to examine a flower on the edge of the field. It was star-shaped, with vivid purple petals. Curious, he reached out and brushed a finger across the edge of it. Letting out a cry, he leapt back.

"Ingvar! What's the matter?" Keallan asked.

"The flower... it cut me!" Ingvar held up his hand. Blood dripped down his wrist. "It was sharp as a blade, but it looks like a normal flower!"

Later on, they find out that it was poisoned and a trap set by the Faeries. So they had to convince the Faeries to heal Ingvar.


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The ruins were crumbling, but the sun was setting, setting them ablaze with light. It almost made their surroundings look alive again.

"We'll camp here for tonight." Keallan sat down on the ground and began to take things out of his pack.

Ingvar wandered over to the wall of one of the stone structures. Runes were carved into it. Peering closely at them, he tentatively reached out a hand and drew a finger through the grooves of the engraved letters.

Suddenly, a low rumble started up, loud as a dragon's roar. Ingvar stumbled backwards.

Yes, the whole place crashed to the ground. Go figure.


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"Be careful. Nothing in this forest is as it seems," Keallan instructed his companions. "No one has ever returned from here."

"Thank you for the cheerful thought," Ingvar said drily.

They walked on. Ingvar was moving faster than the others, and thus pulled ahead by a few yards. He stopped short when something shimmered in front of him. It was like a glowing mist. Experimentally, he waved a hand through it to see if it would dissipate. It didn't. A vaguely humanoid-shaped face appeared in the mist. Suddenly its jaws unhinged, and an unearthly howl started up.

Keallan ran forward and pulled Ingvar back. "You just can't stop touching things, can you? You can't not touch!"


Yes, Ingvar has a touching problem. XD Not really, but I thought this would be funny.

Author:  Caeli [ September 19th, 2012, 5:38 pm ]
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Keallan ran forward and pulled Ingvar back. "You just can't stop touching things, can you? You can't not touch!"


LOL I have some characters like that... :rofl:

Author:  Balec Verge [ October 13th, 2012, 1:22 pm ]
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Ha-ha-ha!

My siblings and I used to 'play characters' together - what they would say, do, how they would interact together, etc. and when we said something that they wouldn't say or cracked a joke we would either say "Cut!" and go back, or "rewind" and repeat the previous sentence and move on.

Doing it in a book...That'd be interesting. I might actually try this!

Author:  Maid Nua Kells [ April 18th, 2014, 10:30 pm ]
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I have too many blooperish things. Here is one little idea that may or may not make it into the book.

Brief charrie profiles: Kastan is 20 years old, orphaned, raised by old people, depressing childhood, ISTJ, loves good and right, forced into becoming an adventurer, hero role.
Wynne is 10 years old, is a secret agent with her brothers ages 15 and 19, sweet, fearless, very mature but still a kid, ISTP, cute kid role.

Wynne frowned at him. “Ye’re a grump, Master Kastan.”
He sent her a shifty glance. “I am not a grump. I am logical, reserved, and matter-of-fact.”
“Then those things’re no fun t’be.” She glowered. “I can’t imagine how ye wer’ ever a little boy. I be’chee had no friends because ye were too busy being logical.”
He did not let her know that she had struck him deeply; he just shrugged. “I was a boy once.”
“I don’t see how Queen Elya’s yeer best friend. She’s so sweet and fun, and ye’re no fun.”
Kastan folded his arms. “Well, then, I also dislike little girls.”
Wynne fumed. She stuck her tongue out at him and stomped away. Kastan suppressed a wry smile as he laughed inside.

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