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 Post subject: Song (more like a rap)
PostPosted: November 15th, 2010, 12:33 pm 
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Here is a song I wrote, I'm not done with it though.....

This title is unknown yet though.........

VRS1
You try to make me who you want me to be
But I'm not you I'm me
Stop trying to make me something I'm not
Cuz whenever I follow you, a bullet is shot
Straight towards my head
Trying to make me fall, shoot me dead
Stop Deceiving me
Let me keep reaching for His Glory
Cuz I wanna live life for Christ
So stop following me, I've already made up my mind

VRS2
I've heard every lie of yours
And it won't work this time, I've got an umbrella to stop your downpours
He will keep me in a safe place, Oh Yea, He's something I can't replace
He's Number 1 In my life, And I'm Never going back to Old Times.

Chorus
Cuz I wanna go where He Leads me
I wanna be who He wants me to be
Life would be nothing, Yea I'd be lost
Without Him Dying for me, He paid my cost

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 Post subject: Re: Song (more like a rap :) )
PostPosted: November 15th, 2010, 1:48 pm 
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I've never listened to much rap but I like the message in this! Very straight to the point and well written :) Music writing is one of my favourite past times, thanks for sharing this! :)

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From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king

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 Post subject: Re: Song (more like a rap :) )
PostPosted: November 15th, 2010, 3:24 pm 
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Yea, I'm better at singing a little bit faster, than I am singing...I don't have that good of a voice, but I like to sing a bit. :O

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 Post subject: Re: Song (more like a rap :) )
PostPosted: November 15th, 2010, 11:33 pm 
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I like it Malchus! Who is the song addressed to? Sin?

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Nolan- And though I don't understand why this happened, I know that I will when I look back someday, and see how you've brought beauty from ashes, and made me as gold purified through the flames.

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PostPosted: November 16th, 2010, 10:20 am 
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Yea, it's addressed to sin, and how it tries to pull us further away from Christ.

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 Post subject: Re: Song (more like a rap :) )
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I like it. :D I have one question: Would you sing Verse 2 through twice? It seemed shorter than the first one.

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 Post subject: Re: Song (more like a rap :) )
PostPosted: November 25th, 2010, 11:05 pm 
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I love good rap and I love writing song lyrics. :-)

Enjoyed your song!

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