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Author:  Lady Vilisse Mimetes [ November 1st, 2010, 10:58 pm ]
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I found this a while back on a blog...

Challenge: Write/Tell a complete story in just 69 words.

Example:
I wait with tight nervousness. There are vague sounds in the background, but I’m too preoccupied to hear them. My eyes glance at the double-doors; willing them to open. "How could this have happened?" I whine inside, like every mother, sister, friend and daughter before me. The doors open. A man steps out and looks at me, his white lab coat spotless. The look says it all: “She’s okay.”



NO deadline :D make your own if you want or write a story on-the-fly.
In the words of Sir Emeth:
Quote:
This is a perpetual challenge.
Author:  Airianna Valenshia [ November 2nd, 2010, 7:28 am ]
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Wow, I’m not sure I’m talented enough to tell a story in 69 words! I had a hard enough time writing the 100 word drabbles!
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 2nd, 2010, 11:36 am ]
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I am learning the art of short, but so far not that short! I'd be willing to give it a try, though, if anyone else is interested in a challenge.

Great paragraph, Vili!
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 2nd, 2010, 11:39 am ]
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I'll give it a shot. :D
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 2nd, 2010, 11:47 am ]
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Lizzie! Are we setting a deadline or anything? :)
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 2nd, 2010, 11:54 am ]
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What exactly do you mean by a deadline? Like a time limit, or something?
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 2nd, 2010, 12:06 pm ]
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Yes. Nothing too serious, but something like "We'll both try to write a 69 (or less) word story before Sunday."
Author:  Lady Vilisse Mimetes [ November 2nd, 2010, 12:14 pm ]
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Philadelphia wrote:
Great paragraph, Vili!

Thanks! I figured I should post an example and decided to try and write one 'on-the-fly' :cool:
hehe, not very fantasy-ish was it?



Attempt #2:
The dragon lifted her head. She had been gone for years and everything had changed. Changed for good. The evil king had been defeated in her absence and she had returned in time for victory. A stab of sadness pierced her as she reflected over the past years. Her mate was gone. Her family dead. A small head nuzzled her side. Her child lived on. Yes, everything had changed.
Author:  Andrew Amnon Mimetes [ November 6th, 2010, 4:49 am ]
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OK, here's my closest attempt. Basically it's a second story idea I've got about Eruheran (aside from the Dorodhiel one) about Asrifel, his daughter:

Desperately Eruheran sprinted through the forest. If he hurried, there could still be time to save her! As he emerged from the thick forest he saw the smoke in the distance. His heart stopped, and he fell to the ground in despair. The moon rose, shedding light on the scene. He could only watch the funeral pyre burn. He was too late to save her. Asrifel was gone forever.

eruheran
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 6th, 2010, 9:38 am ]
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Hmmm... How about we do from the 14th to the 21st? (My life will be soo much less complicated after the 14th, when I don't have debates, tests or conferences coming up. :P)
Author:  Whythawye [ November 6th, 2010, 1:20 pm ]
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I would say do a running deadline. Meaning don't make the challenge expire. The idea I want for this room is to collect challenges that people can do when they are looking for some motivation. I don't want it to expire. :)

Good idea!
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 6th, 2010, 1:30 pm ]
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I like the idea of it not expiring; I was talking about Philli and I racing. :)
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 6th, 2010, 5:21 pm ]
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Deal, Lizzie! :D

That was moving, Eruheran. I don't know anything about the characters, but the concept - death - is one I can relate to regardless. I enjoy the deep emotion.
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 6th, 2010, 5:27 pm ]
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It's on! :D I will mark my calender with a Sharpie , and hopefully look at it. ;)
Author:  Andrew Amnon Mimetes [ November 7th, 2010, 8:14 pm ]
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Thanks, Philadelphia! =) The problem with a 69 word story is you're left wanting to expand and explain everything; basically, to write a full story.

eruheran
Author:  Riniel Jasmina [ November 7th, 2010, 8:22 pm ]
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Wow, I don't know if I could do it... My three page freshman creative writing project was 10 pages...
Author:  Elanhil [ November 7th, 2010, 8:56 pm ]
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That's a long three page project! Nice story Eruheran.
Author:  Evening L. Aspen [ November 8th, 2010, 4:02 am ]
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Here's the first paragraph of a story that I'm not supposed to be writing (gotta finish NaNo first). It stands alone pretty well:

The bow sat still and silent upon the string. The crowd hushed, waiting for the music to begin. With a nod to the conductor, the girl pulled the bow slowly and gracefully across the string, drawing a heartbreaking melody from the instrument. With each passing measure, the tune became more complex and beautiful, a song sung deep from within the heart of the voiceless girl who played the violin.
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 8th, 2010, 10:39 am ]
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Well if that's the case, Eruheran, then it serves as inspiration. A launching pad!

Riniel, short is hard. For some of us, it's an art we have to learn. Try it! It's worth the struggle to whittle down your words.

Evening, that was lovely! I'd keep reading.
Author:  Elanhil [ November 9th, 2010, 10:40 am ]
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Good story Evening! It's very interesting. By voiceless do you mean mute?
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 14th, 2010, 3:35 pm ]
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This is the week! Are you ready, Shawn? Who else is along for the ride? :D
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 14th, 2010, 3:38 pm ]
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Oh yeah. I have some Ideas, I just have to work them out. :D
Author:  Aragorn [ November 14th, 2010, 10:40 pm ]
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Philadelphia wrote:
Who else is along for the ride? :D


I am. :D
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 17th, 2010, 11:59 am ]
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Yay, Jonathan! :)

I want to work on this today, so clarification please: Should this story be exactly 69 words, or just 69 words or less? I don't think we specified either way.
Author:  Lady Vilisse Mimetes [ November 17th, 2010, 1:51 pm ]
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exactly 69 ;)
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 17th, 2010, 4:10 pm ]
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Understood. :D Thanks!
Author:  Aragorn [ November 21st, 2010, 8:40 am ]
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Here's my 69 word story:

Carnival music beckoned to the boy, against his parents’ wishes, against common sense. That night, he crept out his window and through the woods, to see the dragons, vampires, and winged men. Other people were there, drawn like him--then trapped for monster food. The boy ran, but winged men caught him. Suddenly a knight appeared, slaying with a glowing sword, and his father’s arms carried him safely away.
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 21st, 2010, 3:26 pm ]
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Jonathan, I love your story. There's powerful imagery, a character arc, a "moral," and emotion densely packed into your 69 words.

Here be mine:

Quote:
I lost it. I counted twice, three, ten times – but I only had nine. I checked the purse, the chest, the robes. I asked if it had been spent without my knowledge. It hadn’t. I wept. My mother-in-law said, “Don’t consider something hopelessly lost until you’ve cleaned the entire area around it.” I lighted a candle and swept the whole house. Underneath the table was my lost silver coin.


Lizzie, where you be? :D
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 21st, 2010, 4:39 pm ]
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On guard! Here I is! (Long story... :P) Here is mine. It's called Awakening the Dawn, tentatively.

Her eyes searched beyond the predawn sky as she took out her treasure. She raised the silver reed to her lips and began to play a simply melody. Her fingers glided over the holes rhythmically, and the dawn added a glow to the music as she poured her heart into the memory. The sun rose, illuminating a figure. She ran to her father, his lullaby remembered after long years.

And here is a preview of the lullaby, since I couldn't find the whole thing right offhand. Click on "Beautiful Girl" (track number 16).
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ November 21st, 2010, 5:19 pm ]
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That is sweetly emotional, Lizzie. I like the depth and color.

This was a fantastic challenge!
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ November 21st, 2010, 5:21 pm ]
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Thanks. And I agree, Vili, great idea.
Author:  Aragorn [ November 21st, 2010, 7:59 pm ]
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Thanks, Philadelphia.

I enjoyed this challenge, too.
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ December 1st, 2010, 3:04 pm ]
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My goodness, I forgot to add the song that inspired my story! :P *goes to edit her post and add it in*
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ December 1st, 2010, 4:18 pm ]
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That's neat that you based it off of a song, Lizzie! The site wasn't loading for me, so I couldn't listen to it. :(
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ December 1st, 2010, 4:39 pm ]
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Thank you. Hmm, that is curious. I just tried it, and it worked fine for me. :?
Author:  Riniel Jasmina [ December 2nd, 2010, 6:19 pm ]
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Breathing heavily from a loss of blood, she turned her deep blue eyes to connect with his. She sensed his fear as he held her hand and spoke softly to her. Her eyes closed and head laid back. She looked as though she were deep in the best of dreams when she had really woken to the greatest of mornings. He greatly anticipated the day he would follow her.
Author:  Lady Vilisse Mimetes [ December 2nd, 2010, 6:28 pm ]
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That's beautiful Riniel! So sad and happy at the same time :'(
Author:  Rachel Newhouse [ December 2nd, 2010, 6:41 pm ]
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Agreed, I really love the emotion touched with the glow of hope, Riniel.
Author:  Riniel Jasmina [ December 2nd, 2010, 6:46 pm ]
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That was my hypothetical death if I ever get married and severely wounded in battle. ;) Thanks guys.
Author:  Kiev Shawn [ December 2nd, 2010, 7:54 pm ]
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I liked it a lot. It was very real, and the emotion was very strong.
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