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Author:  Lady Elizabeth [ June 17th, 2014, 10:32 am ]
Post subject:  The Waves of the Sea
This is a poem that I wrote for a school project. Let me know if it sounds good!

The Waves of the Sea

The waves of the sea are gently blown,
Those beauitful waves of blue and green.
The gills of the swimming fish are shown,
Making quite a beautiful scene.

The waves then lap upon the shore,
Making such a lovely sound.
These waves are followed by many more,
Always ensuring that wet sand will be found.
Author:  Lady Elanor [ June 17th, 2014, 10:33 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
It's beautiful, Rachel. My one thought would be to drop one of the 'many, many more and just have many more, and also maybe drop the that in the last verse. It's brilliant though, I can just picture it. :D
Author:  Lady Elizabeth [ June 17th, 2014, 10:33 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
I'll take out the second many. I thought about that, but left it. Thanks!
Author:  Lady Elanor [ June 17th, 2014, 10:34 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
Okay, and you're welcome! I hope you share more poetry soon. :cool:
Author:  Lady Elizabeth [ June 17th, 2014, 10:34 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
I'd love to!
Author:  Elijah McGowan [ June 17th, 2014, 10:34 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
Ooh! That was pretty...
Author:  Sienna North [ June 17th, 2014, 10:35 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
Ooh, how beautiful! I love the soothing, peaceful, sloshing feeling of the poem. I feel like I'm swept away on the ocean currents myself. Lovely work! :D
Author:  Calista Bethelle [ June 17th, 2014, 10:35 am ]
Post subject:  Re: The Waves of the Sea
I like it, Elizabeth! :D I can see the ocean! XD
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