That was brilliant! I loved it, Cadenza. Beautiful.
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| Author: | Cadenza [ June 16th, 2014, 9:48 am ] |
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Vulnerable I wonder if I’d like to be The upper, topmost twig. Where every breeze that drifts my way Stirs my fragile roots and makes me wonder if I will break and fall. Every branch below me Does not quaver like I do For they are strong and sturdy Breezes must be powerful to sway their strong arms. I wonder if I’d like to be the upper, topmost twig. For the first breath of winter would chill my bones the first I would be the first feel those shivers running up and down my spine Even while the strong branches below me didn’t feel it. The first needle of sleet would bite me first. The first marble of hail would crush my vulnerable ribs before Any of those powerful pillars below me. I wonder if I”d like to be the upper, topmost twig. For the Spring would kiss my upraised face before any of the others I would be the one to welcome her advent. Before any of those branches below me. The first splash of summer rain would cool my skin The first snippet of lace would balance on my fingers Before the branches below me even knew it was snowing. So there I would be. Dashed by the wind and crushed by the hail. Staggering back to my feet again and again because I know that Spring is coming I will be the one to welcome her. I will be one to fondle the snowflake I will be the one to see it first. Please tell me what you think! |
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| Author: | Lady Elanor [ June 16th, 2014, 9:49 am ] |
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That was brilliant! I loved it, Cadenza. Beautiful.
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| Author: | Cadenza [ June 16th, 2014, 9:49 am ] |
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You're so sweet, Elanor! Thank you! 
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| Author: | Andrew Amnon Mimetes [ June 16th, 2014, 9:49 am ] |
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I second Elanor, Cadenza: that was brilliant. Very very well-written. I especially loved how it morphed from negative to positive  Andrew |
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| Author: | Cadenza [ June 16th, 2014, 9:50 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Vulnerable |
Thanks! My sister wasn't sure what to think about it always changing from warm to cold, so I'm glad you like it!
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