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Long has it been since I posted anything new here on the forums. I'm sorry for the absence, but I'm going to Japan in July for a mission trip with my two younger brothers, and we've been rather busy preparing for that.

Anyway, here is a short story I wrote regarding the creation of my world by Vitaren. It is still in its first draft, but eventually I want to post it to my book website, so any suggestions would be nice. It is a rather new idea I have been toying with, in order to kind of get it to fit with the rest of the Bible and with Christ's redemptive sacrifice. The idea is that first the universes were created, full of planets, which were covered totally in water to reflect their maker's glory (see Gen. 1:2). After the Expulsion of Moren, Vitaren created men, whom he charged to watch over all of creation, and maintain it, which is how there are humans in every universe.

The "threads" that I mention connecting all of the universes are actually more like pathways, allowing people to travel between the universes, if the need arose. When Adam and Eve ate of the Tree of the Knowledge of Good and Evil, sin traveled the threads between the universes and infected all. Finally, when Cain murdered Abel, the spilling of innocent blood severed the ties, making travel between the universes impossible. Because Adam and eve were set to watch over all of creation, and because they sinned, all of creation was tainted, and all of the universes fell under the curse. Therefore, Christ's sacrifice atoned not only for the human race, but also for those who fell under the curse due to their disobedience.

What do you think? Am I overstepping my bounds as a fantasy fiction writer? I am worried about adding too much to Christ's work on the cross, or making it into something other than it was. Do you agree? I may also use this concept of threads between universes in a sci-fi novel...

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Novadar Mimetes

Moved to Chronicles.

Ok, thanks!

I don't think you're overstepping it.

Stories with multiple universes are tricky, theology wise, but I know someone whose writing his thesis on Christianity and multiverses.

Let me know when he's finished, that would be a very interesting (and helpful) read!

Okay.

Ditto!