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 Post subject: The smiling dead!
PostPosted: October 28th, 2011, 3:43 pm 
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The smiling dead is a creature I came up with for my book.
The smiling dead are kinda like zombies but a lot more intelligent. If you use magic in my book and use a very powerful spell, :evil: you can raise an army of dead humans that smile and kill whoever you want them to kill. D: You can only kill them by lopping off their head!! :shock:
Tell me what you think, and how to improve them. :D

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
PostPosted: October 28th, 2011, 5:15 pm 
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:shock: Wow, that's kinda creepy, makes good plot opportunities!

Is your book a thriller? Horror? If you want to make it a bit more dark you could have beheading not the way to kill them, but they will keep coming no mater what. So the only way to get rid of them (since you can't kill them), is to make it so they can't do anything. :twisted:

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
PostPosted: October 31st, 2011, 6:02 pm 
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I love that they smile!

Do they look cute? Cute things that are evil are insanely creepy. :shock:

Don't even ask... :pale:

You need a name for them? I'm an expert at names. :cool:

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
PostPosted: October 31st, 2011, 6:19 pm 
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O.O

O.o

....o.O

Creepy. :shock:

I love it. :cool:

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
PostPosted: November 1st, 2011, 2:55 pm 
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Josiah wrote:
Is your book a thriller? Horror?

Nope, just a fantasy type book.

Josiah wrote:
If you want to make it a bit more dark you could have beheading not the way to kill them, but they will keep coming no mater what. So the only way to get rid of them (since you can't kill them), is to make it so they can't do anything!
Thanks, but there has to be a way to kill them. :/

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Do they look cute? Cute things that are evil are insanely creepy.

I don't think there cute. Because if stinking rotting flesh and huge eyes :shock: are cute, I'm a monkeys uncle, (But if its was a kid that just dies then it might be cute.) Oh and by the way there smile is the [I want to kill you] type smile. :twisted:

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You need a name for them? I'm an expert at names.

That would be great :) Just PM me. ;)
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Creepy.
I love it.

Thanks. :dieshappy:

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
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What color are they? Gray? Do they have skin peeled away to reveal a hollow cavity surrounded by bones? I think that's uber creepy plus awesome! Are they dressed in armor? Rags? Are maggots crawling out of their ears?

Oh! How bout' skinless! You see the muscles! 8D

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 Post subject: Re: The smiling dead!
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Seabird wrote:
What color are they?

An evil rotting brown type colour. :o
Seabird wrote:
Are they dressed in armor? Rags?

What ever they were dressed in when they died. :evil:
Seabird wrote:
Are maggots crawling out of their ears?

maybe!!! :shock:

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Have you read Brisingr? This is similar to the "Laughing dead in the that book.

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I have read brisingr about a year and a half-ago. I forgot about that. :P

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Seabird wrote:
Do they have skin peeled away to reveal a hollow cavity surrounded by bones?

I think I might change it so that, you have to carve out/stab a special organ to kill them instead, of having to lop of there head. :o

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