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| Author: | Timotheus [ August 26th, 2010, 9:53 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | The General's Shadow: 3 Main Characters | 
| The short story I posted on my google docs is now the first book in a series with my other book idea (fka Ixia and then Taking Solus) as the third or later installment. My protagonist is Commander Uman Re, an overzealous late twenties space soldier who must cope with failure in the mission that was to make his career in order to preserve God's Word and people by saving a small group of survivors on an unknown planet. My deuteragonist is Ehli Orson, a former prisoner that Uman rescued who is 4 months pregnant and soon to be the target of a clever plan to create advanced DNA in order to populate a new breed of warrior mechs. She won't become a warrior mech, just the mother of a race to come which will make up Koslo's army. My antagonist is Koslo Evelan, a man who worked his whole life to be accepted as an Osuna elite citizen, but who had his ideas stolen and then was sent to the prison where Ehli was also sent. Koslo leaked info to the Arakun that one of the prisoners had intel on the location of the war mech manufacturing center. This brought a rescue mission, which Koslo and his men snuck onto and then disabled the "jump drive" just outside the orbit of a planet he discovered in a system with a unique mineral capable of increasing war mech strength. This planet, Kitane, has oxygen and is liveable. He plans to establish a secret base while Uman gathers the survivors of the crash and then one by one implant women with his DNA robots, or whatever advances their DNA. When he is done collecting "samples" he plans to kill the rest and start a new civilization with the children of his new specimens. Koslo's main goal is to make this galaxy the base of operations for what will eventually punish the Osuna who wronged him and force everyone else to obey his will. (This will take a while, so anti-aging will have to be created, you know, no big deal  ) Uman must embrace his task quickly in order to keep Koslo from wiping out what may be the last Aragraph and faithful from the physical realm of the universe. The Osuna are winning the war. It is likely, since Uman's "hail mary" shot to get the war mech location failed, that the Osuna have taken over the last remaining Arakun planets and quickly removed all traces of their faith. | |
| Author: | Elanhil [ August 26th, 2010, 10:56 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: A Humble Speck in Space: 3 Main Characters | 
| Ooh.. This story sounds very interesting. So, it's about this guy who is the last hope of his civilization, or religion? That's the only point that confused me, but you've got quite the plot there.  I'm gonna go read this story in a little while.   | |
| Author: | Timotheus [ August 27th, 2010, 4:58 am ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: A Humble Speck in Space: 3 Main Characters | 
| Thank you Elanhil! He is the last hope of both. The Arakun are a society of believers in the Messiah. The Osuna killed that Messiah and feel a society based on such beliefs is detrimental to the development of their Utopia. The Osuna are a very high tech civilization, to the point where it is all about your social status and how much pleasure you can indulge in. The Osuna developed the neuronet, an internet system within their mind and body that is always connected and which can take them anywhere they want in their mind. The Arakun are not against technology, but the way the Osuna use it to control people and their desires so that they do not look to God for help, but technology. The Arakun are losing and if Uman fails here, they have even less hope, so in his mind he will learn to see it more as needing to follow God's will than that he is the last hope, because God could use someone else somewhere else. | |
| Author: | Elanhil [ August 27th, 2010, 11:14 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: A Humble Speck in Space: 3 Main Characters | 
| Well, hopes definitely look slim for the believers, I apologize but I haven't been able to read it. Our internet went out yesterday, I'll try to get to the Google docs folder today. | |
| Author: | Lord Kieren Mimetes [ September 19th, 2010, 12:55 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: The General's Shadow: 3 Main Characters | 
| Sounds good.   | |
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