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Author:  Elanhil [ July 20th, 2010, 7:41 am ]
Post subject:  Merashath

Ok, here is Merashath's essence. Be looking for errors, please, however small.

Merashath
#An old character that has been abandoned. Also my username because I liked his name.#
BODY{
___Strength[
______Legs(
_________<Talons of an eagle>
_________<Bare as a birch tree>)
______Torso(
_________<Firm as a knight’s armor>)
______Wings(
_________<Wide as the oceans shore>
_________<Efficient as a mill>
_________<Powerful as a blacksmith’s hammer>)]
___Face[
______Eyes(
_________<Piercing as a sword>
_________<Searching as a hawk>)
______Ears(
_________<Pointy as an Elf’s>
_________<Bad as an orc>)
______Mouth(
_________<Small as a fish>
_________<Silent as a mouse>)]}
MIND{
___Strength[
______Will(
_________<Weak as a sapling>
_________<Faithful as a dog>)
______Endurance(
_________<Tolerant as a bull>)
______Anger(
_________<Poorly Managed>
_________<Dangerous as an ox #that is, when he is angry, he is dangerous as an ox.#>)]}
SOUL{
___Desires[
______Evil(
_________<Seeks to kill #Merashath is an assassin#>
_________<Thirsty as a desert for power>
_________<A hunter for revenge>)
______Good(
_________<Void as a black hole>)]
___Motives[
______Money(
_________<Poor as a ditch digger>
_________<Deeply exposed to riches>)
______Power(
_________<Powerless as a mouse>
_________<Promised as much power as a lion>)]}
HISTORY{
___Childhood[
______Love(
_________<Received as little as an exile>)
______Esteem(
_________<Low as a worm>
_________<Smaller than a grain of sand>)]
___Teenage[
______Family(
_________<Mother and father died>
_________<Lonely as an ant on a mountain>)
______Turning Evil(
_________<Left to forest>
_________<Found a dark lord>
_________<Dark lord hired Merashath as assassin>)]
___Adulthood[
______Rebellion(
_________<Merashath transformed by magic>
_________<Learns of plot, plans to kill dark lord>
_________<In fit of rage kills dark lord, but becomes greater thing to fear>)]}


I know that the History doesn’t completely follow the original idea of essence, but since Merashath is a character from a story I’ve abandoned, I’m not going to fractal him, and I wanted that piece of history.

Otherwise, is my essence ok? I know that I used similes instead of metaphors, but my brother said that whatever would work. If that isn’t ok, or if there is anything else wrong, please criticize. :D

Author:  Andrew Amnon Mimetes [ July 21st, 2010, 12:04 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Merashath

Looks good. But then, I'm not the one to ask. :D

eruheran

Author:  Elanhil [ July 21st, 2010, 12:16 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Merashath

I learned how to do it from your newbies impression of essence. Thank-you so much!!! :D

Author:  Seer of Endor [ July 30th, 2010, 4:58 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Merashath

good job

Author:  Lady Terra [ July 30th, 2010, 5:22 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Merashath

I thought it was rather good, in my opinion :D

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