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| Author: | Elanhil [ July 20th, 2010, 7:41 am ] |
| Post subject: | Merashath |
Ok, here is Merashath's essence. Be looking for errors, please, however small. Merashath #An old character that has been abandoned. Also my username because I liked his name.# BODY{ ___Strength[ ______Legs( _________<Talons of an eagle> _________<Bare as a birch tree>) ______Torso( _________<Firm as a knight’s armor>) ______Wings( _________<Wide as the oceans shore> _________<Efficient as a mill> _________<Powerful as a blacksmith’s hammer>)] ___Face[ ______Eyes( _________<Piercing as a sword> _________<Searching as a hawk>) ______Ears( _________<Pointy as an Elf’s> _________<Bad as an orc>) ______Mouth( _________<Small as a fish> _________<Silent as a mouse>)]} MIND{ ___Strength[ ______Will( _________<Weak as a sapling> _________<Faithful as a dog>) ______Endurance( _________<Tolerant as a bull>) ______Anger( _________<Poorly Managed> _________<Dangerous as an ox #that is, when he is angry, he is dangerous as an ox.#>)]} SOUL{ ___Desires[ ______Evil( _________<Seeks to kill #Merashath is an assassin#> _________<Thirsty as a desert for power> _________<A hunter for revenge>) ______Good( _________<Void as a black hole>)] ___Motives[ ______Money( _________<Poor as a ditch digger> _________<Deeply exposed to riches>) ______Power( _________<Powerless as a mouse> _________<Promised as much power as a lion>)]} HISTORY{ ___Childhood[ ______Love( _________<Received as little as an exile>) ______Esteem( _________<Low as a worm> _________<Smaller than a grain of sand>)] ___Teenage[ ______Family( _________<Mother and father died> _________<Lonely as an ant on a mountain>) ______Turning Evil( _________<Left to forest> _________<Found a dark lord> _________<Dark lord hired Merashath as assassin>)] ___Adulthood[ ______Rebellion( _________<Merashath transformed by magic> _________<Learns of plot, plans to kill dark lord> _________<In fit of rage kills dark lord, but becomes greater thing to fear>)]} I know that the History doesn’t completely follow the original idea of essence, but since Merashath is a character from a story I’ve abandoned, I’m not going to fractal him, and I wanted that piece of history. Otherwise, is my essence ok? I know that I used similes instead of metaphors, but my brother said that whatever would work. If that isn’t ok, or if there is anything else wrong, please criticize. |
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| Author: | Andrew Amnon Mimetes [ July 21st, 2010, 12:04 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Merashath |
Looks good. But then, I'm not the one to ask. eruheran |
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| Author: | Elanhil [ July 21st, 2010, 12:16 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Merashath |
I learned how to do it from your newbies impression of essence. Thank-you so much!!! |
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| Author: | Seer of Endor [ July 30th, 2010, 4:58 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Merashath |
good job |
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| Author: | Lady Terra [ July 30th, 2010, 5:22 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Merashath |
I thought it was rather good, in my opinion |
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