I like this a lot.
You used a good range of Titles – memories and clarity and depth and logic and knowledge, personality and depth and love and dream. I especially liked the idea of Memory – I hadn't thought of that being an aspect of a person to describe before. But that is a great part of who a person is, what they remember and how they remember it. * smiles a little, thoughtful * Thankyou for that idea.
I like how there are bits in the separate parts of the X that seems to draw the person together as a whole. Like the Logic:Clarity:New student in school bit. It seemed to make sense with the frisk and openness and innocence and – sort of – bubbliness, in her personality. But the next one, 'A lake', gave a little solidity, interest, almost an anchor to her, that made me like her better.
What do you mean as the difference between Spirit and Soul? I think there is more than one idea of what those words mean, and I was wondering what you were thinking of in this case. * laughs *
And I like her name. * grins * How do you pronounce it?
When it comes to syntax, though, there was just one thing I noticed – you use slashes to separate multiple metaphors under one Title. I hate mentioning things like this...because your X is perfectly understandable as it is, and I'm the sort of person who would rather skip being strict as long as I am intelligible. * wry smile * But slashes are also used in X+, for something different, and it might get confusing.
The way Jay said to divide them (though I don't think he made it clear in his tutorial) is by giving each one a separate indented line. Like this:
MIND
..........Memories:
.....................Quality: A meadow of flowers
.....................................chocolate
.....................................music playing softly
Another thing which I noticed, but isn't really a problem, is that most of your metaphors are Concrete or Allegorical. Maybe you could consider adding some Abstract, if you didn't think of that. * smiles * It might not be a good idea though, I wouldn't know – it really depends on the actual essence you are trying to portray. Some of my X's are nearly entirely Allegorical, some are mostly Abstract.... I just thought I would mention it.
Oh, and I almost forgot...instead of putting a Title 'As a whole' over some of them, wouldn't you just leave them without one? Like -
Dream:
..........Depth: Concrete
........................A candle always burning
........................Everlasting love at first sight
........................A dandelion reaching for the sky
..........Crushed: Freshly mowed grass
...........................trampled flowers
...........................A broken window
...........A spark
...........The lighting of a bonfire
............Striking of a match
............Springtime
............breaking dawn
............First stroke of paint on a masterpiece
Sometimes it's a little hard to define the two. 
It was very helpful, and now I feel like I have a better understanding of essence mapping. 
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