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Celestria
 Post subject: Dreamer's Essence
PostPosted: February 3rd, 2010, 7:59 pm 
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This is the essence of the main character in the book series I'm writing now. I'm not exactly sure if I did it right, but here it goes.

Dreamer
… Body {Eyes……..[Color (A newly polished sapphire)
……………………..[Depth (A clear pool)
………………………………..(Desperate longing)
………………………………..(piercing as an eagle’s eye)
…………………......[Sparkle (Stars at night)
……………………………….(Lightning flashes)]}
………..{Smile……………….(sun shining through the trees)
………………………………..(rainbow after a storm)
………………………………..(rare as a shooting star)}
……….{Hair…........................(the color of chocolate)
………………………………..(flowing like the wind)}
……….{Motion………………(swift as an arrow from a bow)
………………………………..(an eagle in flight)
………………………………..(a gust of wind)}
……….{Beauty……………...(light in darkness)
……………………………….(a moonlit night)
………………………………..(a summer sunrise)}
…Spirit {……………………..(heart of a warrior)
………………………………..(mysterious as night)
………………………………..(a caged animal)}
…Soul {Longing……………..(friendless in need of a friend)
………………………………..(a second chance)]}

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 Post subject: Re: Dreamer's Essence
PostPosted: February 5th, 2010, 9:09 am 
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You did a great job! I think my favorite metaphors might be the ones in "smile". You did a really great job with those ones! :)

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Mama Raven Mimetes
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PostPosted: February 5th, 2010, 2:28 pm 
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oooo
eyes as deep as desperate longing.

I like it!
The whole thing is good.
:)

~Raven

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The books or the music in which we thought the beauty was located will betray us if we trust to them; it was not in them, it only came through them, and what came through them was longing. These things—the beauty, the memory of our own past—are good images of what we really desire; but if they are mistaken for the thing itself they turn into dumb idols, breaking the hearts of their worshippers. For they are not the thing itself; they are only the scent of a flower we have not found, the echo of a tune we have not heard, news from a country we have never yet visited.

All the things that have deeply possessed your soul have been but hints of it—tantalising glimpses, promises never quite fulfilled, echoes that died away just as they caught your ear... We cannot tell each other about it. It is the secret signature of each soul, the incommunicable and unappeasable want . . . which we shall still desire on our deathbeds . . . ~C.S. Lewis

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Lady Jaryn
 Post subject: Re: Dreamer's Essence
PostPosted: February 6th, 2010, 9:55 am 
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I'm really liking it!! I especially like the smile and the depth of the eyes..

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Celestria
 Post subject: Re: Dreamer's Essence
PostPosted: February 8th, 2010, 12:44 pm 
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Thanks! I'm glad you all like it!!

And Lady Jaryn, I would have to agree with you. Those are my favorite descriptions of her too. :D

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Lord Kieren Mimetes
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PostPosted: April 30th, 2010, 9:18 am 
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Very nice! :D

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Lady Terra
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PostPosted: May 1st, 2010, 5:35 pm 
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I like it!

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I slipped past the gate with Malka and ran into the forest, gazing back one last time to see the lights of my beloved city, Arenford--and the capture of my last living relative, uncle Eldon.

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Celestria
 Post subject: Re: Dreamer's Essence
PostPosted: May 2nd, 2010, 7:20 pm 
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Inesdar wrote:
Kind of the 'helpless innocent'


Innocent, yes... but helpless. Ha! You do not know my friend. She can be much more dangerous than she appears. :roll: Ok, so I'm bragging on my character - a little.

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