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| Author: | Lady Elanor [ August 16th, 2011, 2:09 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Phillip's Essence Map. |
It feels a bit choppy here and there, I think. Anyhow, here is Phillip's essence. He is going to be one of my characters in Tevo; I'm not fixed on his name yet, Phillip is temporary. BODY Eyes Color - Blue ice glimmering in the morning sun - Soft as melting butter - a gold ring glinting in the moonlight - Warm as the setting sun Depth - A well filled with water, the end unseen. - Holding the future in his hands, something he doesn’t realise - Yearning to learn more, a thirst for learning. Face Shape - Round, gentle lines - Soft, the touch of fresh flowers - A wise man - A tender son Color - Like a white rose, tinted with pink - Cream and Strawberries. - A Pure, Pink Pearl Strength - Strong as a full grown lion Studious - Prefers study to fighting - Four older brothers who are warriors, is left at the side-lines MIND Knowledge - Can guess the opponents next move before they make it - Wiser than his years Amount - An undiscovered cave - Star filled night sky. Hope - A cloudless sky - Happiness - The Sun’s rays playing on a field of poppies - Passing stormy clouds SPIRIT Peaceful - A sleeping baby - A blackbird singing in the sunrise - A pink sunset Mind - A clear spring - Cloudless sky - A Teacher - A refreshing morning breeze |
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| Author: | Elly [ August 16th, 2011, 2:17 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Phillip's Essence Map. |
Oh, I like it! There was one place that I was confused, "A pale pink perfume". Could you perhaps change this to make it flow better? |
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| Author: | Lady Elanor [ August 16th, 2011, 2:22 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Phillip's Essence Map. |
Thanks, Elly! Ok, I changed it, but I'm not sure it's much better. |
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| Author: | Calista Bethelle [ August 16th, 2011, 4:43 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Phillip's Essence Map. |
Great job, Elanor! |
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| Author: | Lady Elanor [ August 18th, 2011, 9:11 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Phillip's Essence Map. |
Thanks, Milly! |
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