Umm, I might have gotten it, but I'm not sure. This is my first essence map, I want to see what everyone thinks. I probably haven't hit it though; kind of ran out of steam halfway through. But anyway, I want to see if anyone thinks I'm close to it yet. This is my feline character by the way. That might be why it sounds cliched. I hope no one minds that I used a similar format to everyone elses.


Azura:
~Body . . . . {Eyes . . . [color. . . . . . . . . . . (Evening Sky)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Ocean at Night)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Star Sapphire)]
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . [Depth . . . . . . (Forever Friendship)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Night Sky)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Deep endless pool)]
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .[Expression . . . . (A welcome home)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Sleeping embers)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (An open book)]}
. . . . . . . . . {Movement. . . [Grace . . . . . . . (Ice Dancer)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Wind through cedars)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Gentle Snowfall)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (An assassin’s stealth)]
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .[Strength . . . (Sweep of a waterfall)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (A stalking tiger)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Hidden wildfire)]}
. . . . . . . . . . {Beauty. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (A pale rose)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Aurora Borealis)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Hidden treasure)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (A rare Snow Flower)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Cloud’s silver lining)}

~Spirit . . . . . . {Faith . . . . . . . . . . . . (A blue flame)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Victorious battle flag)}
. . . . . . . . . . .{Leadership . . . . . . . . (Steady rock)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (The Alpha wolf)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Protective Dragon mother)}
. . . . . . . . . . {Love . . . . . . . . . . . (A blooming rosebud)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (An immortal song)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Arrival of spring)}

It looks to me like you got it. Nice job! She sounds like a sweet kitty.

I noticed a few syntax (or whatever you call it) errors, but that is no problem to fix. Basically, you need to "close your tags". Here's an example:



Instead of putting the closing ] after color, it should really be after "Star Sapphire", which would make that set look something like this:

~Body . . . . {Eyes . . . [color. . . . . (Evening Sky)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Ocean at Night)
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (Star Sapphire)]

(Sorry, I messed up some of the spacing.)

That way, you're showing that "evening sky", "ocean at night" and "star sapphire" are all describing the color of Azura's eyes. There were a couple more of these mistakes, but they're really easy to fix. (Make sure you close the curly braces ({ }), too.)

I really liked your metaphors, especially the ones describing her eyes.

Another thing that I find helpful is to line up all of the different brackets in a column. For instance, I make sure all of the { are in a column, all of the [ are in a column and all of the ( are in a column. It helps to keep things organized and tidy-looking. It's also helpful to copy your map onto a spreadsheet, as that helps organize the metaphors and it's really easy to add new lines.

Good job! It seems like you're understanding it, though that doesn't mean much coming from me as I just learned essence mapping myself. Jay, please correct me if any of my ideas were wrong.

~ Alaethea

Thanks Alaethea.
I went back and corrected that. Now that I think about it it makes more sense.

It looks great! I really liked the "Cloud's silver lining" metaphor!
One thing I did notice is that you don't really need to say that an endless pool is deep. You can keep it that way if you want, but that was just one of my thoughts.

Looks good

I think after reading a few of these, I'm starting to understand it a bit more. I might try to do one of these later.

Thanks guys.
Sapphira, I honestly didn't get it until I actually started doing it. Probably wasn't the smartest thing for me to do, and it was really hard, but it worked! And I'm still figureing it out. I feel like I'm missing something. . . could be my imagination. Hope so.

Now that I'm done with this one, I guess I'll start another. It's kind of addicting.

Ciela, I quite agree.

You did a very good job. I like it a lot. There is a lot of leeway in Essence.

Thank you everyone for helping her out! You all did a very good job!

Though I think 'deep endless pool' is fine, if that is what she wants. Think about this essence fragment:

2nd Level {
................Density [
.............................(Shallow, endless pool)
.............................(Lava erupting into a sea bed) ] }

Ciela, by "endless" did you mean "going on forever in one direction", or "endlessly deep"? I think I might have misunderstood you.

Umm, I think when I wrote it I meant endlessly deep. Sorry if I confused anyone . Everyone is such a big help on here, I definitely feel more confident about this whole essence thing.

Now I can't wait to start another.