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Author:  Dri [ May 5th, 2011, 7:46 pm ]
Post subject:  Tornado Cyclone
I will try to make one on Tornado Cyclone for a start. Feel free to laugh!

Body: average for a 17 year old
 Hair: smooth, straight helmet hair
  Texture: soft
  Color: apple
   
 Eyes (before): confident
  Color: mud
  Warmth: like a teddy bear
 Eyes (now): acid
 Skin: standard Caucasian
  Color: this is a hard one... what's tan?
 Grace: of a bird
 

Soul: Pure and full of good intentions
 Heart: loving
 Mind: clear
  Clarity: like a crystal wall

Spirit: strong willed
 Loyalty: a dog's loyalty
 Courage: of a hero
 Faith:

Texture: rough, cowhide feeling. Battle-scarred.
Author:  Lady Elanor [ May 12th, 2011, 10:44 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Tornado Cyclone
Well done, Dri. I would love to see: Texture: Soft like a ...., so it gives more of a picture.

Nicely done, I didn't feel like laughing, it's good! :D
Author:  Reiyen [ May 14th, 2011, 10:15 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Tornado Cyclone
Nice Job, Dri, you have the basic formatting down.
What you should try is putting in metaphors instead of adjectives. For instance, instead of saying
Quote:
Color: red

say Color: blood
or Color: sunset
or Color: something-else-that-is-red
The idea is by insinuating a metaphor, you give a world of meaning in one word. Like in my Reiyen essence I described his countenance or face as a chiseled statue, rather than saying "sharp angled" or "solid." In one metaphor, by saying that his face is a chiseled statue, I conveyed both of those and more.
Author:  Dri [ May 15th, 2011, 7:21 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Tornado Cyclone
Thanks for the tip. I was wondering what a metaphor was before this.
Author:  Ana Mimetes [ January 17th, 2012, 1:06 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Tornado Cyclone
Dri wrote:
  Color: this is a hard one... what's tan?
 .


I don't know if this helps, but I'm a tan caucasian and I refer to myself as "Carmel colored".
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