Nice Job, Dri, you have the basic formatting down.
What you should try is putting in metaphors instead of adjectives. For instance, instead of saying 
Quote:
Color: red
say Color: blood
or   Color: sunset
or   Color: something-else-that-is-red
The idea is by insinuating a metaphor, you give a world of meaning in one word. Like in my Reiyen essence I described his countenance or face as a chiseled statue, rather than saying "sharp angled" or "solid." In one metaphor, by saying that his face is a chiseled statue, I conveyed both of those and more.