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| Author: | Constable Jaynin Mimetes [ November 27th, 2010, 1:02 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Christiana | 
| I love essence... This map is unfinished, and I'm not sure why. I think I don't know what to do next. It's not my first map, but it is my best, and I decided it's time to post it here for all you critics.  *still doesn't like the syntax* Christiana {Body [hair (color <sunbeams> .........................<light reflected on the water>) .........[eyes (color <cloudless sky> ..........................<a still lake>) ..................(depth <midnight>) .........[smile (brightness <light glinting off a mirror> ..................(suddenness <a ray in a prison cell> ...................................<the sun coming out from behind a cloud> {Soul [youth (a sapling tree) ........[complexity (a many-colored tapestry) ........................(weaving) ........[laughter (sound <chapel bells> ...............................<bird song> ...............................<running brook> {Spirit [Freedom (flying <an eagle far above the ground> ................................<a dove above a castle spire>) ..........[Purity (innocence <white-petaled flower> ...................................<a wild thing seeing humans for the first time>) ...................(untouched <unpicked morning glories> ...................................<a beach with no footprints>) ..........[Love (simplicity <child running out to her father> .................................<a hound dog> ...................(fierceness <a mother hen>) ...................(loyalty <a river on course> ..................................<birds flying north> ...................................<sunrise> ..........[Desire (intensity <a prisoner waiting for release> ..................................<a seed waiting for sunlight> ..................................<a desert wanting for rain> | |
| Author: | Kiev Shawn [ November 27th, 2010, 3:53 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: Christiana | 
| Oh, I like it, Jaynin.  I especially like how you described her smile and freedom. | |
| Author: | Elanhil [ November 28th, 2010, 5:42 am ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: Christiana | 
| I like it too. See? Essence isn't so bad.   | |
| Author: | Lady Shanai-Irisis [ January 19th, 2011, 9:22 pm ] | 
| Post subject: | Re: Christiana | 
| Jaynin, Christiana sounds like a very beautiful and blossoming young lady! Great descriptions! | |
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